Opinions ?? for my kikass poem lolz

Question

say boy

you were my first

love, kiss, "boyfriend"

i'm head over heels

but won't say till the end

cuz i know it's never forever

and things always change

i can take it

i'd rather the truth than 4 u to fake it

i gave you my heart knowing

one day you'd break it

but right nowthis moment i'm lovin every second

love should come in a bottle

doctors #1 i recommended

for depression and any kinda sadness

he makes me smile when i'm running on maddest

best drug ever and works the fastest

i'm high when sober

like i can't even walk straight

people jealous

so thwey constantly hate

they can't have what we have

they can't do it like us

we got a suped up mustang

they ridin the bus

we like warriors for heart

knocking down walls & ppl dividin

i don't care what momma say

you already know i'm ridin

Answer 1

Got a rap vibe going on... I'd like to hear you read it... that  always sounds better ... but I'm feeling it ...

Some minor errors but you can fix that...

Try posting in the RHH section, and see what kind of  feed back you get.

Much love always!

Temari