Opinions on my poem?

Question

Waited all week for the phone call that never came

Waiting for the moment of the heartache and shame

Waited for the one that makes it all right

Waited for my lover to come into sight

I sit here and wait and curse those that dare

To come into my life and want me to share

A heart waiting and wanting for that one special man

To tell me he wants me and to go with the plan

With sunflowers and butterflies and all that is fine

A 6 pack and kisses and a man that should be mine

A pat on the shoulder when all is "all right"

A peck on the cheek when all are out of sight

When people aren't looking and no one can see

This beautiful man is looking at me

My heart gives a shudder and then is in flight

To know that my love is right there in sight

He ignores it and ponders what he should do now

He looks at his wife thinking "that girl...OH wow"

This hair on my shoulder, her words on my lips

The way that she teases, the motion of her hips

I am trapped in this life that I chose to live

I hope that my dear "someone" learns to forgive

For I want her and need her and love her too deep

But a promise to my wife in front of the Lord I shall keep.

Answer 1

Not other tragic love poem

I'm so sick of these...

Answer 2

That's really cool. I wish I could write a poem that cool and meaningful. I really like the last line.

Answer 3

Your poem is it good

Its confusing

Its cliche

Everyone does tragic

love poems

btw Intheends poems aren't

about stupid love...read them again.

Also you can't go ******* physco

just because some doesn't like your work