Opinions on these?

Question

I listened to you,

But I didn’t hear anything you said,

Provoked from the corner of this room

Our eyes laid down their presumptions,

And set aside the regiments

Of an orientated world,

Who called these two to bed?

Was it the leather bound man with no voice?

Or the boys who sat quietly in the corner,

The only thing unnatural in this place is your reservations

The first misinterpreted touch of feeling,

The last understood sound of reason

A moan left shrieking through your halls

“I’m all lost” you say

Sitting in the middle of your room

Tinkering with your spinning bottle

There’s only two of us, I know what you’re getting at.

I’m sick and tired of these innuendos

What happened to the good old days

When lust received in many ways,

Bonded, burnt, scolded, beaten

Laid to rest and finally eaten

Come here… be your first, and I’ll come last.

Answer 1

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 2

whoa, I liked both of them. good job.

Answer 3

Googled some of the lines.  No evidence of plagiarism here. I would say " excellent".

Answer 4

very very lovely and nice poem

'viva'

Answer 5

good poem!

Answer 6

very good, at last someone realises that poems dont have to rhym!!

they were really deep, but i think you could go deeper, go more into the emotions rather than the situation

but as i said you are REALLY good