this is an assignment
and you can tell me if its bad, but pls if you say its bad can you tell me what i can fix or whats bad about it? :) thanks.
the story is about a family moving to another town, and before they leave, their dog runs away. a guy finds it, then yeah the girl and guy meet, and romance starts. lol.
pls tell me where my run on sentences are, argh, i always use them :(
oh and sorry if its on a fast pace, the story is only 1-2 pages. so yep
here it goes:
“Let’s go!†my sister, Patricia shouted. I rushed my way down the stairs, checked that everything was with me then shut the door. My parents, Jack, my younger brother, and Patricia were waiting for me outside. I took a deep breath as we all looked at the old brown roofed, yellow bricked house we’ve lived in for all our lives. Before I could stop myself, wet, salty tears came flooding down my eyes. My family and I just stood there for a few minutes, when suddenly there was a loud bark. It was our dog, Oscar. He came running to me and started l*****g my face, and I could see it in his eyes he didn’t want to leave either.
“Aw, Oscar, come on, boy.†I whispered as I pulled him closer to me.
Then it all happened in a matter of seconds.
I couldn’t believe it. Oscar was gone. He had run away.
We were already in the car, on our way to our new house, to a new town. Houses, buildings, cars blurred past me as I looked out the window, thinking. Where did Oscar go? Why’d he run away? Will we ever see him again? Without realising, fresh tears started their way down my face again, and I couldn’t help it.
“Beatrice? Are you okay, darling?†My mother said.
“I’ll be fine.†I replied with a smile.
“We’re going to get him back, trust me.†My father promised.
I really hope so, I sa
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