PLEASE Read and Comment On My Poem "Addiction"?

Question

Addiction

When there’s nothing left to hold

And I have no one left to care about,

That’s when my fingertips turn cold

And I will grab the closest route.

I will hold it in my hand

And feel the bottle’s gentle lullaby,

Until I know that I can’t stand

To let another second by.

Then I open up my cure

And let aromas lead it to my mouth;

At last I taste the velvet pure

Like summer nights down in the South.

As my body echoes deep,

I feel the chills run up and down my spine.

I let my senses fall asleep,

And once again, I’m feeling fine.

Answer 1

wow! great poem,man! But the first verse has really no rhyme but Bravo! whats this for? anything?

Answer 2

i would like to tell you just one thing which you should never forget that

           "THE WRONG WAY IS EASIER THAN THE RIGHT WAY , ALWAYS"

           YOU DON'T SEEMS TO BE AN OPTIMIST .  

you have  good  talent of writing poems so, i would recommend you to be optimist and then write whatever you want to write .

                           And you will notice that you have really something good .

    one more thing - you should try some meditation its really good.

Answer 3

"Too much of anything is bad, but too much Bourbon is just enough."

--------------Samuel Longhorn Clemens.

Answer 4

theme is absent with proverb

write strong words and verb

use some sentiment and laugh

yours is no doubt is understand to tough

Answer 5

Addiction is a tough thing to deal with, unfortunately I feel many people choose to struggle alone, thats why so many continue to struggle.  I believe that turning towards alcohol/drugs/whatever in times of need/stress is because there's an emptiness in a persons life that they try to fill up with alcohol/drugs/whatever.  I guess everyone owes it to themselves to find out what that emptiness is.

Answer 6

Your poem is so good! I love it! I've always been intrested in poetry. Do you play an instrument? You should make in into a song.