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PLZ ANSWER....WHAT DO U THINK ABOUT MY POEM?

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Here is my poem:

It's called Open Door.

Whenever you see an open door

Do you walk in or stand still

Life is like this

We don't know

If we should stand or go?

If we should reach out a hand

There is no one man band

What do we do

When do we go

These are the questions we ask ourself everyday

To die or to pray

So if we believe

Can we actually acheive

Well I know what I gotta do

I gotta follow my heart

And believe in You.

Tell me what you think? Also, here is another poem tell me what you think on that one

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thats a really good poem!

its really creative, keep writing them because your really good at poetry!
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There shouldn't be a question mark by 'If we should stand or go' unless it was 'should we stand or go'

Other than that it is ok
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Honestly?

A little dullsville.
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I think it was great!
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that was good. i liked the end part.
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Thats really good and its really true =)
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It's open, clear, and to the point.

I liked it.

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It sux.
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To a guys perceptive view I think its pretty and very well done.

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It has POTENTIAL!!  needs work.

I understand what you are trying to do here.  You have a big decision and you are rationalizing it to yourself.  Should I go through this door?  Is it worth it?  Are my fears valid?  Am I over thinking this?  Just jump, i can't go though life alone...  I see the process.  I just feel like it was poorly executed.

I think that you can do better if you put time in to it, don't settle for rhymes.

The rhymes seem very forced.  No real beat.

A prime example of forcing and settling is the line "If we should reach out a hand/There is no one man band" I read the second line and though "WHAT?!?"  it comes out of nowhere and really has nothing to do with the poem (From were I am sitting anyway).

It has POTENTIAL!!  needs work.
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O my goodness, this is good. I think you are very creative.

Keep up the good work.
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