PLease Critique my poem??

Question

Now

I have reason to cry

i have reason to hate

i know what it feels

to lose it all

to have it one moment

then to have nothing

but a few soot covered memories

hoping my memories

never fade

because now

thats all i have

Answer 1

I see by your poem its about realization

because it is having reason to cry

The third line says it

for example I know how it feels

to lose it all

knowing the good and bad.

Answer 2

I like it.  Very expressive

Answer 3

Thats great, i can relate.          keep going its not too late       to have more than just memories and hate

Answer 4

This is pretty good. Your line breaks and use of enjambment are right on.

Answer 5

very expressive i must say, i like the intro, a few gramatical mistakes there e.g where yu say 'i know wat it feels' guess yu meant to say i know how it feels or i know wat it feels like (that tells me yu didnt read it over and over and over - yu should always do) i never stop reading my poems, even ones i wrote years ago and thot were gr8 i still find a thing here or there to edit. the poem im afraid to say felt a bit weak in the middle, yu coped out a little, but picked it up again towards the end. with more wk i feel it can be even better, though i must say i identify with yo style of writing - so its little wonder that i like the poem. good luck!

Answer 6

wow, i have to say this is really good.  love the way you've chosen to separte the lines out. it gives it a bit of rythm. i would change the "what" in "i know what it feels" to a "how" because that would make sense a bit more. overall very good though.

well done! :)

emz