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Lady Luck By Ru Hewage

There are whispers that cry

In gasping breath

In quiet chambers

Not for from here

Have you heard them?

There are angry mobs

shooting arrows in silent wars

In desperate days

Not far from here

Have you heard them

There are hungry mouths

picking through bins

Loosing dignity

Not far from here

Have you seen them ?

There are those that hear ! there are those that see!

Then there are those that blame the desolate

With no understanding that its a cycle

Without a sigh they go on blamin

Forgetting that they are lady lucks chosen ones.

copyrights@ruhewage

Answer 1

Ru, i see where you are with this very

loose 'verse' if i may humbly suggest,

turn the tv up !.

Nah really it's shite !

copyright@virgin.

EDIT: try to spell before

you attempt prose !.

Answer 2

very good