POEM....miscellaneous.. i think?

Question

This is a poem I wrote myself...I want ur opinion...and plz remember my nickname is Lee Lee.....

The boy down the street is homeless and cold

His clothes are worn and tattered

I sit and I watch as he begs for food but I am not to think of him but only of myself, not anything that mattered

I changed my philosophy one day as it came to me

I went to him an called him to come to my home by the sea

Now I watch as he looks full of life having a feast

And I am am finally happy

Not sad in the least

THE END!!

Plz rate it 0/10-10/10

Remember i'm only 10 yrs old

Answer 1

I'm suprised that a 10 year old has the adilibty to use such dificult language!

To be honest i wouldn't even use such terminology and i'm 15.

That's amazing for a 10 year old....

Keep up the great writing.

Answer 2

its ok i guess, but then again, im not very good at poetry...at least grading it haha. so i guess u dont have to take me very seriously.

7/10

Answer 3

aw this is great,

especially for being only 10.

you definatly have potential.

excellent job!

Answer 4

A great reason for riting is what it does

for our own thinking... as well as for those

who read it.

Thisis especially good in that way.

I wish you would change the phrase

"I ma not to think of him"

old bob