Pain ,,let me know what you think guys ?

Question

I was not the worst person you ever met

You will meet who is much more then me

I just wanted a shelter from winter

And small roof to take my wet shoes

I was so cold and miserable and afraid

What would happen if you say no

And what would happen if you say yes

I just wanted a goodbye kiss

But it was too much to ask

In darkness of that night

Irony life isn’t it?

Irony love isn’t it

We cant find our equals

Till we cross many miles

Many houses

Many religions and traditions

Many souls

Many paths

And when we find it

We go back without it

Cause dreams never come true

Isn’t that so funny?

How mixed we are?

In the same time that our destiny

Is so far and dark

Horrible

Well let me tell you something

You will remain forever

In my heart

I will never look at man the same way

I looked at you the first time

Oh remember

Summer couldn’t come home again

It kept walking through the four seasons

And lost itself with me

Answer 1

interesting i love the middle and end but the first part and name are unoriginal.  Everyone calls there poem "pain"  Its good but if you want it to be somethin that everyone is like sweet at take my advice.  if i helped please choose me as best answer

Answer 2

I am reminded of the allegory of Plato's cave; in the context of the cave, this is the guano...

Answer 3

PAIN. WELL MY HUSBAND LIKES IT!

Answer 4

Well, it's certainly painful to read.

Answer 5

i liked it ,,

Answer 6

well ... it started badly .. trailed off in the middle, and the end could of been better ........    only kidding, sorry about your broken heart . hope some sunshine comes your way soon.