Parents tell what you think of this letter I wrote as a response to a Nanny job?

Question

I have previously worked as a Nanny for 7 years and have excellent references. If you are looking for a, fun-loving, reliable and well rounded caregiver for your child, then please contact me. I can be reached at [e-mail]. I wish you the best in your search for a Nanny. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Answer 1

I would take out the "Please believe I would never criticize or harm your child in any way." section. I'm not saying you would. But s a parent that throws a red flag up to me.

Answer 2

would love to help , but i dont see anything

Answer 3

"in response to you ad "

**correction**                "   your ad  "

"Currently, I am a pursing a degree "

**correction**                 "pursuing"

"I attend classes at night so; working during "

                          ** correction**  "I attend classes at night therefore working during "

" My boys attend Elementary School and participate in after school activities which their father picks them up from, so you don't have to worry about anything interfering with my commitment to your family."

                            ** correction** re-word or leave this statement out.  This makes you sound defensive.  You are over-reaching, working too hard.

" Days in my care are flexible and fun; we will enjoy strolls in"

                             ** correction** "Days in my care will be flexible and fun. We will enjoy strolls in the neighborhood,"

"Naps are important, but should not be forced; down-time is good too"

                           **  correction**  leave this statement out unless you know the parents views on naps.

"I am willing to, run errands; take the child out to their activities and do any cleaning as it pertains to your child I have a clean driving record, and I do not smoke."

                             **correction** "I am willing to run errands, take the child out to his/her activities, and do any cleaning that pertains to your child.  I have a clean driving record, and I do not smoke."

"I am looking for full time Monday-Friday. .A work week with a start time of with a starting time of 7:00 am, and no more than 30-40 hours a week would be ideal for me"

                              **correction** leave this out.  You need to get a face to face meeting before placing demands on a prospective employer.

"If you are looking for a, fun-loving, reliable and well rounded caregiver for your child, then please contact me."

                             ** correction**"If you are looking for a fun-loving, reliable and well rounded caregiver for your child,  please contact me."

Answer 4

It sound's great. One correction "I attend classes at night so; working during the day will not be a problem for me." Should actually be, "I attend classes at night so working during the day will not be a problem for me." Other than that one little mistake you sound well qualified. I have to ask though, if your working full time, and going to school all night, when are you spending time with your kids? I know this doesn't pertain to your question, but it's something you might want to think about before taking this job. I hope this helps!

Answer 5

Where's the response?