People are hating my "serious" poem, how about these shorties? 1 is happy and the other is depressed. ?

Question

Teddy-Head Slippers

As slippers they're functional

But friendlier then friends

Looking up from the floor

Full of warming thoughts, awaiting

The next step.

Last Wednesday

uncooked spaghetti

causually dropped

cracked

shattered

swept up by as careless

a broom as you

have ever known

Answer 1

Those sound good. I'll see your other poem.

Answer 2

I think they are very poetic.  Keep writing poetry the way you want to.  Great job! =]

Answer 3

They're actually nice. I like them. =)

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