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Pleas rate my poem its my first?

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i hope u like i am not used to writing poems this is my first poem umm i just wrote it i was not thinking of someone or pain or anything i just wrote it :d

as the sun rises are eyes finaly meet

my hart stops pumping from the happieness with in me , altho the pain and hurt cant go down ,but as i look with in me i sea you i sea hope i sea faith i sea love ,i look past the pain and hurt, that i have been throw altho it was hard but when i looket in ur eyes i was fulled and driend with love and hope and as i speac i know that u are mine and i am yours , until are eyes meat aging il be waiting , il waiting for you the end i know some words are not right but try to read it pleas

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  1. it's rubbish

    i could say it means something but i'ld be lieing coz apparently it doesnt mean anything to you

    you "just wrote it" so it doesnt make any sense to me


  2. It sounds more like a little hurt/love letter than a poem. But it's very expressive anyway.

  3. it 's ok, some words could be touched up for readers to decipher better, practice format and have fun,☺

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    listening to lights ~drive my soul,

    http://www.myspace.com/lightsnoise

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  4. I like it, and your really good for a first time poet. Some of the grammar confuses me though because I'm not sure if you purposely misspelled something, or did it accidentally

  5. First correct grammar and punctuation, then we will talk.

  6. TERRIBLE RUBBISH WEIRD MAKES NO SENSE!!!!

    KEEP WORKING RIGHT NOW YOU ARE NOT GONNA BE A POET FOR SURE

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