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Pleas rate my poem.... little boy?

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There's a little boy

about two years old

he's treated like a toy

his mother's heart is cold

his mommy doesn't love him

to her he's just a mistake

she leaves him cold and lonely

while her coke gives her a break

he still sits in diapers

no shoes on his feet

the money's used for drugs

and his mom sells her body on the street

the house is cold and empty

no bed, no couch, no chairs

he doesn't even exist

in his world nobody cares

bruises on his arms

cuts on his side

mommy always beats him

everytime he cries

he has no time to play

no toys, no food to eat

he cries because he's hungry

so his mom covers his face with a sheet

no sound from his lifeless body

his chest doesn't rise anymore

his mommy took his life

left him dead lying on the floor

he never asked to breathe

or for the heart beat in his chest

he never asked to live in h**l

or for his mommy to put him to rest

he lives at home with god now

that's exactly where he should be

he didn't deserve the pain he had

but now his soul is free

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  1. OMG that's so sad, but you did a really good job.

    I was seriously just about crying.

    Good job.


  2. i  liked how you told the story however morbid. this poem is perfection.i like your writing...i really do.I'd love to read more whatever you do don't stop.

  3. life is hard as it is ,when you see and hear this stuff on the news let alone read about it in a poem

  4. i like how you didn't just make it an overdramatic "emo" poem, and the happy ending was a lovely touch.

    how bout mine? http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

  5. a few rough spots but verry good

    8 out of 10

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