Please, tell me what u think of this poem?..................?

Question

when all is lost and broken

when there are no words to be spoken

when you can not follow what you've chosen

you know that i will be there

with a grin thats sure to tear

made to leave you cold and bare

and while I laugh, smirk, and leer

I'll expose your inner fear

and so i creep below perception

leaving you to want and question

all your hopes and all your dreams

sometimes its easier it seems

to give it all up and let me in

I'm the darkness, I'm your friend

ok...its deppressing...i know...dont point out the obvious...it makes u sound ignorant

Answer 1

As a poem, not very good...as a Rapp...not bad!  Why different reviews for different styles? because Rapp, unlike poetry, uses repetition and short rhymed lines for "beat"...it's expected to sound contrived at times and, like songs, gets away with patterns that would never pass muster as more refined poetry....ergo, as a Rapp, it's pretty good.  Watch for typo's like "its" when you mean "it's", as in "it is".

...keep writing

Answer 2

i think it's good

Answer 3

I like it, but it make you sound a little cruel...XD