Please Comment on my Poems?

Question

ok i wrote these about my crush and ya.

AFTER THE RAIN

He will come rescue me

Like Romeo and Juliet

but he can't now

the rain is pouring

so are my tears

but after the rain

the sun must shine

TEARS

the tears in my eye

they are so painful to me

He won't notice me

Please comment! :) i wanna get better and you ppl can help! thx!

Answer 1

um those poems seem depressing so i would have to say that they are sort of good because they dont rhyme so ya

Answer 2

After The Rain is okay...but Tears doesn't really make sense (maybe it's to short).

Answer 3

Keep writing your thoughts on paper one day you might have a MASTERPIECE!!!!!

Answer 4

After the Rain - No, it doesn't rhyme, but that doesn't mean anything. Some of the best poems don't rhyme, but this isn't one of them. There's really nothing complimentary I can say about this, except it's easy to follow. Romeo and Juliet isn't exactly a deep allusion, and the general flow seems juvenile.

Tears - Short and to the point. Unfortunately, it's an insipid point.

From this, I can't say you have a knack for poetry. Best of luck on future endeavours though.

(This is just my personal opinion. Poetry is very objective.)