Please Read, What do you think of this??

Question

STD's come with me, an inside persona you cannot see,

Destroyer of life inside he, and even she...

Can't believe all it took was needle in me/

to really find out the disease within, forgive my sin

forgive this pen....

And all i have is this paper, my new voice maker/

read and believe what i say as i find my new faith,

can't retrieve what you say, too many thoughts on my mind/ hope to find god in due time... or maybe he'll find me before the end of this ryhme...

So STD stay with me,

final chapter of my life is known by the white coats,

makin me feel like brand new wheel... to bad its used/ to bad its abused...

My short lived track record like Prefontainte/ yet feel no pain,

and nothing to gain.. but a few more days of life without restrain....

So STD.... ur killin me

What do you think?

Answer 1

Wow, that was really, really awful. Anyone who can mix "Prefontaine" and STD in the same poem deserves a little credit, but that was pretty terrible. But I say that in terms of your poetry, not its sentiment. I am glad you were able to get your feelings out. It is just that it could be the worst poem ever written.