Please Revise my Opening story :)? just a few paragraphs! <3?

Question

It sounds AWFUL i need help revising it.

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Years Ago, lived a young girl, there was nothing special or odd about this girl, Just a normal child living a normal life with a normal family.

She attended a school like any other kid would do, had no friends like many others. She cried everynight feeling sorry for herself wondering why

no one would give her a second glace when all she would do is give and show nothing but love even to the ones who didn't even deserve it.

A Kind child with a caring heart, yet very self-centered. Just your average immature elementary student, But little did i know

the tribulations i soon would encounter.

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I Feel as if i added to much of the same word. i want it to sound full of emotion, some places it needs more. But i want more professional words *not good with vocabulary*.

If not that...then just any revising would be helpful ;__;.

this is not for any book to be published, or for schoolwork. just something I do in my free-time.

Answer 1

There once lived a young girl with crimson hair and jade-green eyes. Unlike most stories, there was nothing special about this girl. She had no powers, and didn&#039;t know anyone who did. In fact, she was your average elementary school girl, with an average family in a normal town.

At school, she had no friends. After a day of doing nothing but caring for others--even the bullies who didn&#039;t deserve care--she would lock herself in her room and cry until her mother said it was time for dinner. Then she would use some eye drops so her eyes weren&#039;t so puffy, and went skipping down the stairs to eat with her family.

That child was me. I was your typical self centered kid who didn&#039;t know what to do about her life. Little did I know that would all change, and I would be faced with real problems.