Please can you tell me your opinions on this poem i wrote yesterday?

Question

Friends

What would you do if you didn’t have a single friend?

Whether they were proper or just pretend

you would feel quite lonely with nothing to do

And you wouldn’t know how much they are special to you

There would be no laughter or no fun

There would be no one to sunbathe with in the sun

There would be no one to have fights with when it starts to snow

and there’d be no one to share secrets with so no one would know

who would you go shopping with when you go in town?

who would be there for you when you are down?

who would you stay up with half the night?

having midnight feasts and a pillow fight?

you never truly know how much a friend means to you

and so what I am telling you is actually true

you don’t need to argue, fight or be unkind

it just isn’t worth it, keep this in mind.

Thanks to everybody who replies!

Answer 1

this is outstanding

very heart felt and really well thought out nice rhymes and reminds you how much  a friend is really worth

Answer 2

I love your poem!!!!  It really hit me, it was both light hearted with it's rhyming but very deep in its meaning, you are an awesome writer, keep it up!

Answer 3

Awwwww...how sweet, I hope your friend likes it too.

Answer 4

wow! wow!.excellent!. i too agree with your feelings.it's really very very good. i am intrested too in writing like these poems.

Answer 5

excellent! marvellous!, brilliant mindblowing awesome very good outstanding well done done extremely well!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! very nice and a good one

Answer 6

It's good.  Nice work.

Favorite line:  

who would you stay up with half the night?

having midnight feasts and a pillow fight?

Really drew a picture from my own past of having sleepovers and all the excitement that it brought to my little world.

Least Favorite line:  

And you wouldn’t know how much they are special to you

Just seems like a clumsy line when you read it aloud.  How about this:

And you wouldn't realize how special they are to you.

Just my humble opinion.  Keep writing and fend off the non-creative, mundane, 9 to 5 work week, and welcome the creative inspiration that lives within you.

Answer 7

wow its maddd

plus it ryhmes

can i use it? ( as in homework)

Answer 8

I think you poem is so sweet,

reflecting on the way that you treat;

the people that inspire,

your senses to admire,

praising them in such good taste,

and not having such qualities go to waste.

Answer 9

spot on! thats really really good!