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Please comment on my poem? appreciated!=]?

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The smallest of whispers in her ear,

The smallest of smirks on your lips,

In the glass box,

That you have caught her in,

She can be watched for your pleasure.

Her rare smiles are only for you.

If you can find them.

Her palm may rest against the cool material.

The intricate flowers weaved into her locks may bloom.

But in such darkness.

Can such a life survive?

Her purity has cast her aside.

Her heart has declared itself void.

Her sorrows can be sung for centuries,

Her memories may fade.

Could such a love live?

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  1. lovely poem.


  2. yeah thats cool keep up the good work id love to be able to write such stuff you have a talent for it nice 1

  3. It's very beautiful. Interesting to understand and interpret.

  4. deep lol

    no, its very good !

    sounds meaningful

    :)

  5. Very different and unique, I really liked it!  I'll be looking forward to reading more by you! Keep your poetry in array of different subjects, this will keep interest of many readers!! Good Job !!! Cheers !!!

  6. I love the first half of this, with the analogy of being caught in a glass box for observation.  Very captivating right from the open lines.  You used the repitition to your advantage and made for a strong character in only a few lines.  Well done.

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