Please comment on my poem.

Question

I'm 14 yrs old and I've written this poem...

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The sun was rising from the lap of the mountain

The little birds once again perched near the fountain

The rays of the sun painted the sky red

Asking us softly to leave our cosy beds

The sun rose slowly and kissed the fleeting clouds

The clouds blushed red and felt very proud

For the sun shone brightly resting in its bed

Wishing us gaily to have a great day ahead

Please suggest how can I improve or should I?

Answer 1

That's really good.........wish i could write like that :)

Answer 2

nice use of words.

happy poem :)

Answer 3

I have very interesing poem i like it

Good Luck

Answer 4

Excellent!

Answer 5

lovely

bravo.

lol it was TOTALLY great

Answer 6

I really liked it you should change a thing its great how you wrote it