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All I want is for you to trust me,

So all I've given you is honesty,

I'm trying to understand you,

and I can tell,

You're trying to hear the truth,

I know it's hard to have faith,

When you've been hurt before,

I know because I'm the same way,

I guess both our hearts are sore,

But please, just try to trust me,

everything I say is true you'll see,

Just how wonderful TRUE love can be,

So tell me anything,

Believe me, I've already accepted your ring,

I love you THAT much, you've just gotta klnow it's true,

I'd never ever think about leaving you!

♥WWP

TITLE? COMMENTS? Anything appreciated, Thanks a ton!

Answer 1

really good sweet poem

Answer 2

Whitney,

Your sonnet style is sweet and to the point and I like positive uplifting messages. But grammatically it's little flat and something's you omit don't make sense. Maybe if you make four sentence verses or stanzas it would be a lot better to read...

BELIEVE

Love can be more trusting

We need to give more honestly,

Don't make something out of nothing

You have to let love be.

Have no doubt

And go all out

I'm falling to my knees,

All we have to do is believe

The feelings I have for you

In all the love songs that they sing,

Thing that lovers go through

The I Do's to wear your ring

Make it clear

Everyone can hear

So high I can barely breathe,

All we have to do is believe

Answer 3

Needs quite a bit of work, but hints at some promise (maybe).

Answer 4

I like it...

Answer 5

I really like it, thank you!

Answer 6

Wow, that is really deep. I can feel all the emotion in it. I love it.