Please comment this poem !?

Question

here's my poem i woked really hard on... please comment & critisize :;

life comes aht you in interesting ways

the good ole times, the difficult days.

iht isnt always what you expect,

buht nobody said iht would be perfect.

a look, a smile, a friendly cheer

they lift me up from my despair.

the darkest nights & scariest days,

i find a way through, ihn the oddest ways.

mistakes are something everyone will make

life is a journey we all must take.

through the times both good & the bad,

what makes you happy & what makes you sad.

no matter what may happen today...

i promise you, you'll be okay. <3

thanks alot !

-XobabyygiirloX ♥

Answer 1

Despite the, I assume intentional, typos it is good enough for Hallmark. I am not praising it, in case you missed thhhat.

Answer 2

Your phrase &quot;life is a journey we all must take&quot; reminded me of a poem called &quot;The Road of Life&quot; by Levi Dilllion Burzlaff

http://www.poetry.com/dotnet/P7333056/99...

However - I like your version better - especially the last line. Very uplifting. Keep up the good work.

Also - why are you using the &quot;h&quot; - like in &quot;buht, aht - these are distracting to people who are used to seeing &quot;but, at&quot; ♥

Answer 3

Life comes at you in different ways

the good old times in difficult days.

It isn&#039;t what you expect

But nobody said it would be perfect

From a look came a smile and then a friendly cheer

They lift me up from my despair

I find a way through the oddest way

or

I find a way in the oddest way

Answer 4

omg! I love it!

But why do you have all the &quot;h&#039;s&quot;

No criticism from me =]

Anwer mine if you can please:

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