Please correct my sms message with your idea which I want to send to MD by cell phone?

Question

Our M.D has given increment to all staff today. Our Managing Director deprives me from present increment. So I want to inform my request to review my increment. I emotionally write the below sentences which you please amend & revise.

"Sir,

You know-I've been working at Meghna Group with you since four and half years. But I did not get satisfactory increment. During this long period I was deprived by you. After your confirmation through e-mail my mind has been kindled with new hopes & inspiration.But today you evaluate my activities wrongly which disappoints me severely.Would you please review my increment? If not, I am confident enough to switch somewhere."

Answer 1

It sounds good, as it is.