Please critique my paragraph!?

Question

In the Film, Salt of the Earth, it showed a scene when the mine workers were striking for better working conditions and better pay. As the men gathered for a consensus vote to strike, their wives were quick to demand improvements in their homes such as heating water. When the all miners went to confront to their superior and to let them now about the propose strike if their needs weren’t met. The miner’s wives came to show support and overall, to remind their husbands that they are also in need of a better living conditions. The scene depicted the miners’ bosses being semi surrounded by their workers and demanding better working condition and higher wages. As the group of men was asking for their demands, las Mexicanas came on the hillside with signs requesting for a better living conditions (especially heating water).

Answer 1

does heating water = hot running water?

put a , before such

confront to their superior - take out "to"

now=know

propose, add a D

was asking=were asking

requesting for a = take out "for a"

Answer 2

Delete "it showed a scene where," and say, During a scene, in the film, Salt of the....Also, you have a lot of grammatical errors.  The sentence, "When the minors went...." is a fragment.  You also use 'was' instead of 'were'.  At the end, you repeat yourself when you talk about demanding wages. Try to simplify the paragraph by getting more to the point.

Answer 3

"when the all miners" when all the miners?

"a better living conditions" no a or s

add more...it sounds like u just got tired and quit writing. no ending, just a cut off. but besides that it's good :)

Answer 4

In the film Salt of the Earth, there is a scene where the miners decided to go on strike. They wanted their employer to provide them with better working conditions and higher pay, and their wives wanted home improvements such as better heating and water. The miner's went to their superiors and told them they would strike if their demands were not met, and their wives came along to support them. While the miners were surrounding their superiors and demanding better living conditions and higher pay, las Mexicanas came over the hillside with signs also demanding better living conditions (particularly better heating and water).

Sorry I've never seen Salt of the Earth so that was the best I could do! Hope this helps!