Please offer corrections and comments for my small poem?

Question

The ocean is singing of your arrival,

the birds ask me to come along.

The trees are swinging, Sing to me that same old song.

My eyes are shining The desert speaks of rain.

I'll wait if you promise to come again. I will love you like it was meant to be .

I'll be you and set us free.

I won't play with you its dark outside

breathe breathe to say you are alive

Answer 1

I like it.

I can feel the longing.

Nice mental images as well.

:)

Answer 2

The ocean is singing of your arrival

The wind pulls me along

The palm trees swaying, Sing that same sweet song.

My eyes are shining, The desert pleads for rain

I'll wait if you return, and love you for eternity

I'll be you and set us free

I will lay with you until high tide

Breath, breath just to say your alive