Please rate my poem and tell me what you think ?

Question

i wrote this back in june 19, 2007. at 1st i was skeptical, it was writtten for a friend b/c she wrote a depressing poem nd didn't feel well, but looking at it now a year later, i really like it. how about you? thanks !! >_^

Drops of May Weather Storms

I know your pain

Although I don't know what's happening,

I can still feel the vain.

Seems like the beginning is the ending

One moment there's bliss

It feels much like a wet kiss.

But out of nowhere you see a mirror,

"It felt so real," as you stand there alone.

You try to make sense of it all;

Yet everything begins to fall.

"AHHHH!" you scream to the top of your lungs.

Your blue eyes are running waterfalls.

It hurts me to see a single tear,

You're not the only one to hide in the room.

Swallow your tears, don't let it drop,

A splash will only cause more bitter props.

But like I say,

Tomorrow will always bring another day.

So Faith, throw away your thorns,

anticipating a happy God-given next day.

Answer 1

Oh my gosh!

That was a 9 out of 10!

That should be published!! :)

Answer 2

Awhh, its so cuteee. (:

I likee how it ryhmes but I can't pick up a distinct pattern.

I'm sure if I looked for it I could find it but it's not really obvious.

It really is adorable and caring. (:

Answer 3

I personally think this a really really lame poem, where lines barely make sense just so they can rhyme. It screams amateur, and much of it is nonsensical.