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Question

I wish I could understand

the secret part of me

the part that won't let go

the part that wants to be free

I wish that my life would change

and my decisions wouldn't matter

but every time I deny temptation

my heart and soul begin to tatter

i wish i could runaway

and leave my pain behind

i wish i could leave this world

with nothing left to rewind

i wish i could stop the hurt

i put you through each day

i wish i could take it back

i wish i wanted to stay

i want to do big things in life

and make somebody proud

but until then I'm quiet

nobody knows I'm even around

i don't like to keep secrets

or hide my heart that's cold

i don't like to hurt you

this game has become so old

i don't want to hurt anymore

no longer do i hide

i don't want to wish through life

now is the time to try

I'll open up my eyes

rekindle my heart

no more hurt or lies

i will no longer be torn apart

so when you see a change

and believe me you will

no more do i enjoy pain

no longer will your words kill

and when i laugh at you

don't think I'm being smart

because I'm doing what i need

to mend this broken heart

Answer 1

Hey! I really like your poem! Especially this part:

i wish i could runaway

and leave my pain behind

i wish i could leave this world

with nothing left to rewind

hehe. nice poem!

Answer 2

Wonderful poem

It deals with emotions

of wanting to forget

and let go of certain things

and feelings.

You are overwhelmed with

the fear of making the wrong decision.

The fourth paragraph

is with the feeling of guilt

because you are blaming yourself

You are wanting to be a happy person

you can make that happen, by letting out

the bad feelings.

The sixth and seventh paragraph

talks about keeping secrets

Some secrets can hurt and haunt

Answer 3

It's great!

Answer 4

Wow!!! thats a great poem i really liked it!

Answer 5

you should send you poems in it comps. very good