Please rate my poem out of 10! :) ?

Question

OR Am I Just, That Girl

I am that girl, who’s loud,

I am that girl, who’s fun,

I am that girl, who’s talkative,

Am I that girl, who’s kind,

Am I that girl, who’s there,

Am I that girl, who’s listening,

Or am I just, that girl.

What do people see me as,

What will they say,

What do people think of me,

What will they say,

What do people need me for,

What will they say,

Or am I just, that girl.

Will I be remembered,

In five years time from now,

Will I be remembered,

For what I do or say,

Will I be remembered,

One day when I am gone,

Or am I just, that girl.

Or am I just, that girl?

Answer 1

Not bad, but too many repaeted lines. Other than that pretty good

I do alot of poetry and I'd say

6

Answer 2

Repetition is good but I think it's a teeney bit too much. Good overall meaning. 7/10

Answer 3

I think that was great.. but it could do with a bit more work

8\10

Answer 4

I'm not a fan of "finding myself" musings. Apart from that, it's not too bad, and I like the repetition of "that girl".

Answer 5

I really appreciate your anaphoric insistence on "that girl," particularly in the first stanza where the declarative mode is inverted into an interrogative mode.  

Now, I do take issue with the scope of your subject.  You abandon nuance for point-blank assertions, which is fine, but those assertions need to flow logically in order to create meaning.  A reader who is not captivated by an imaginative metaphor must appreciate another aspect of your craft, preferably some sort of imaginative transition.  To me, this poem is emotionally imprecise; you need to spend more time formulating a message, a message that is more than the whim of the present.  If you want to say something, really say something, you first and foremost need to know what you want to say.  Let that authorial intention guide your composition, and use your compositional strategies to fulfill that intention.

As a poetic spark and not a fully realized poem, I give your work a seven out of ten.  Keep it up!

Answer 6

I'd give this a 6/10, it's got quiet a meaning!