Please rate this poem :) I worked extremely hard on it. [I'm 13]?

Question

growing distributions of mental institutions,

revenge, retribrution is not an ideal solution,

mothers and fathers deciding not to even bother,

with raising the right way their sons and their daughters,

careless and careless that's how we are evolving,

just running away from problems that we could be solving,

Human Beings are becoming their own satan,

He's just laughing and getting what he has been waiting,

The prophecy will happen because of our own actions,

God doesn't have a fraction of satans satisfaction,

The few love in the world doesn't last very long,

People who speak out for the right not the wrong,

They're denied by the misguided and ill-concieved ones,

The one's who are s****t and hurt just for fun,

They don't think about the plan the lord had for them,

They don't remember they were a creation of him,

Answer 1

Incredible for a 13 year old!    If you don't mind constructive criticism I have a suggestion.  In some places you have too many words and in other places too few.  A poem should flow off the tongue in a rhythm.  Let me give you an example:  

Careless and careless that's how we're evolving,

Running from problems that we could be solving

read yours and then mine.  I basically just copied you, but the very simple changes I think made it easier to read and more rhythmic.  However I'll say it again, it's very impressive for your age!   Good Luck

Answer 2

Very thought provoking.  I think you did a good job.