Please read this poem and tell me what you think?

Question

The Things I Love About You

Walking down college alleyways,

My gaze has stumbled upon your lovely grace,

Ah if you only knew,

The things I love about you,

I love your jet black hair that’s as smooth as cool night

,I love your wide smile that gladdens my heart,

I love your woman's posture, as graceful as feather light,

I love your oval eyes, shining like diamond art.

I swoon in your presence,

all manliness dissolved.

If only I had a wisp of cupid's essence,

the pain in my heart will be resolved.

Answer 1

it's okay but it needs work. I'am a crtic. Make it more deeper.

Answer 2

Liked it! Romantic.

Answer 3

It starts kinda dreary, but I love how it makes that turn into romance. I really enjoyed it. I love how you used not so commonly used words to express yourself.

Your are a very good poet in my opinion. =]

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Answer 4

Beautiful! Really romantic. You should really give it to the person it is for... I say- if a guy gave this to me I would surely got interested. Good luck!

Pleas could you have a look at this? It is not romantic, though...   http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

Answer 5

It sound like you're in love with and you want to be with her forever no matter what. I love the passion when someone expresses of someone because you care about you. You want to protect, cook, talk to, sleep with, and go out with her in different ways. You want to share love with her. I think this poem is perfect! I loved it!

Answer 6

It's fantastic