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Please review my poem, it's a little personal, about the street I grew up on, sort of....?

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Burroughs Crescent

Burroughs Crescent the shape of, the shoe of a horse,

My childhood lived there, a par for the course

A friend Andrew Brennon his C-64

Hungry Horrace, some Pac-Man but wanting much more

The Foxes on the corner, the 3 of them bitched

about Gordon and Michael, and me in a ditch

The popular girls at Clayton's nearby

they'd backstab and *****-fight, an eye for an eye

The weaker of the kids who frequented that school

were always their prey, me too, what a fool

I was weak as a kitten and wet as the rain,

I look back on those days, I want to refrain

From being a weakling and being so wet,

so easy to cry first, and be teachers pet

"Stand up for yourself" would ring in my ears

from parents and strangers, but mostly from peers

A wish that I have now, to go back in time,

To know what I know now, and correct the crime

Of being so easy to push and to shove

to embrace my beliefs and practise self love

But back to the Crescent, it wasn't all bad

the green out the back, didn't make me so sad

Was a place to play football, and have a good time

with my friends from the Crescent, we'd lay there in line

While we took it in turns, to jump bodies with ramps

and cheap 80's bikes that were pretty much pants

As a road to grow up in, it was never the worst

I learnt from it's lessons, and haven't felt cursed

An adult I know, they were pretty good times

looking into the future, the pathway is lined

With foundations of solid, and robust footholes

guiding me down the right path, and shielding my soul.......

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  1. I am a published poet, and a writer at heart.

    I love your poem, very sentimental, nice colorful language and description, it brings many emotions across to the reader at once, and even though some of it is sad/nostalgic it has an air of happiness and hope to it.

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