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Question

Join Christopher Columbus’ Crew for Fame, Rum, and Women

My name is Christopher Columbus and I am in needing of a few sailors. We will be sailing from Spain and will be going to the West Indies and the Caribbean. We will be going to find gold, spices, cloth, and other items that we see. If you join my crew you will become famous, get a jar of rum for every 12 hours you work, and will get all of the native women you want.

Answer 1

I would definitely revise "and will get all of the native women you want."

Most teachers will deduct serious points for a comment like that.  Rephrase it to say "there are plenty of single native women".