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Question

China supports Sudan to build government buildings and hospitals to influence on its market and government. Hence, the Chinese and Sudan Governments have agreed on buying Chinese goods which receives criticism from the world. The Chinese Government supports Sudan inappropriately because they want to have benefits from a poor country. Canada should learn from this incident that the tied aid that China performs hurts Sudan economically.

Answer 1

China aids Sudan with the develop of government buildings and hospitals as a means of  influencing Sudan's current market and government. Consequently, the Chinese and Sudan Governments have come to an agreement on the purchase of Chinese goods.  This has received criticism from many parts of the world. A great deal of the controversy stems from the notion that the Chinese Government supports Sudan as a means of exploiting this third world country. Many believe that Canada should learn from these incidents, as the tied aid hurts Sudan economically.

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Answer 2

I'm sorry. What do you mean? Revise it in which way?