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Please revise the short paragraph plz its urggent?

by Guest61318  |  earlier

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cheating on one’s family destroys the circle of trust quickly. On Fox Channel, there is a show called “the Moment of Truth.” It just asks yes or no questions. There was a married woman, Lauren, who won a million dollars. An ex-boyfriend came up on the stage and asked if she had to make a decision of who she wants to be either her husband or ex-boyfriend, what would be a choice. If the contestant lied to the question, she would lose a million dollars. However, Lauren answered honestly that she’d like to get married to her ex-boyfriend. Moreover, her ex-boyfriend inquired the contestant if she had committed adultery. Then, she nodded as a sign of committing adultery. Her husband’s face turned to shocking mood. He couldn’t believe that she had committed adultery while living with the husband. “The Moment of Truth” is a show that is for entertainment, but it easily destroyed the conjugale relationship. Lauren cannot be sincere again unless she regrets.

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  1. I made a few minor changes.  It is still rather difficult to understand and the last sentence doesn't make sense.  I'm not sure that the intro statement really describes the rest.  What is your point?  

    Hope this helps some :D

    "Cheating on one’s family destroys the circle of trust quickly. On Fox Channel, there is a show called “the Moment of Truth.” It just asks yes or no questions. In one episode, there was a married woman, Lauren, who won a million dollars. An ex-boyfriend came up on the stage and asked if she had to make a decision of who she wants to be with, either her husband or ex-boyfriend, what would be her choice. If the contestant lied to the question, she would lose a million dollars. However, Lauren answered honestly that she’d like to get married to her ex-boyfriend. Moreover, her ex-boyfriend inquired the contestant if she had committed adultery. Then, she nodded as a sign of committing adultery. Her husband’s face turned to shocking mood. He couldn’t believe that she had committed adultery while living with the husband. “The Moment of Truth” is a show that is for entertainment, but it easily destroyed the conjugal relationship. Lauren cannot be sincere again unless she regrets.

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