Please tell me if you like my poem :)

Question

the sunset so beautiful,

the colors that stretch across the sky

as well as my love that stretches to your heart,

when night falls over the town,

like a thick blanket,

your eyes gaze apon the sky,

to find a star shining,

i am that star you wish apon,

the rainbow you see after a rainy day,

the sun that showers its rays apon you on a hot

summer day,

the water that douses your anger

i am the world that lives in your heart

ok i hope you like it :)

Answer 1

awe, how cute, D:

Answer 2

Its a bit cliche for me. The beginning doesn't quite open well to me. It starts of good enough but then seems to go into another topic altogether about how you are everything to the person--Need to be connected better between the two-The ending I think needs a few more lines too-It has promise

Answer 3

Oh My Gosh!

Its really good, I thought i was good at poems until i read urs!!

Holy c**p Its good!!!!!!!!!

=)

Answer 4

awww thats soo good! keep it up!!!!

Answer 5

It's amazing! Whoever you're writing this for(if you are writing this for some one) I'm sure they'd love it!