Please tell me what you think of these lyrics opinions please...?

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Okay, I wrote this a few minutes ago so don't be too harsh. It's kind of about all the wannabees with streaky tans and how they smoke and all. Out of 10. Please mark it, and tell me what you think...

The Wannabee Song

I don’t want to wear lipstick

Or listen to dance music

I don’t want to be like you

I want to find myself

I don’t want to ruin my health

The things that wannabees will do

So, you can grab your fake tan

And your fake handbag

There’s one thing that I’m sure of

I’ll never want to be like you

(Chorus)

So you can dress like a slag

With your mucci bag

And act like you’re the only one

With your fake tan steaks

Smoking on the street

And you’re as orange as the god d**n sun

You’re a wannabee

I don’t want to ruin my hair

With fake extensions everywhere

I can’t believe people wanna be like you

I want to be me, not somebody else

Cos, if you gotta love, you gotta love yourself

And I don’t want to wear ten-inch shoes

So, I won’t dress like you

Or do the things you do

There is one thing that I know

I’d rather win in life than lose

(Chorus)

So you can dress like a slag

With your mucci bag

And act like you’re the only one

With your fake tan steaks

Smoking on the street

And you’re as orange as the god d**n sun

You’re a wannabee

So, I’m a misfit

That’s been told

You’re gonna be like this when you’ve gotten old

(Chorus)

So you can dress like a slag

With your mucci bag

And act like you’re the only one

With your fake tan steaks

Smoking on the street

And you’re as orange as the god d**n sun

You’re a wannabee

Answer 1

Pretty good. Look at it this way- listen to Stupid Girls by Pink, the lyrics are a bit silly, like yours but the song was brilliant and loads of people liked it.

Answer 2

wow... that is really really good. i would rate it 10/10. i think the words all go together nicely and it doesnt sound too corny which is the main thing, well done on writing that. if i hadve tried to write something like that... well...it would not have turned out anyhting like urs! u r really talented to be able to write something as great as like congrats again and good luck witht he song!

Answer 3

6.5/10 - it's a little cheesy and cliche (based on lyrics alone) and I think you tried a little too hard to make it rhyme.  

Good start though!  I'd love to hear it arranged to some music.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

you made that up!!!!!!!! WOW that's good

is it a rap or pop song cause i think it would be a great rap song

Answer 6

The lyrics aren't the most important thing its how they are arranged to music. There are some truly dreadful lyrics to some huge hits. For example read Some Might say by Oasis, it reads terribly but is a great song.