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The Time After Winter

You've been gone for almost a year

in the time after winter

Longing and knowing are one in the same

Yet two different creatures

Remembrance is survival

Remembrance is my savior

Time spent remembering is lost

and yet that's how I'll continue to spend my time

What if I forget? Should I? Could I?

Forget the time after winter

Many lost, many found, too many

One purpose fans one flame

in the time after winter

Lost there, for us to remember

It's a cold and bitter place

This time after winter

Stranger I will give you a warning

Just one warning will do

Don't be tempted by this place

Or it might just take you too

This cold and bitter place

might just take claim of you

This is a poem I wrote about someone who was close to me that commited suicide..... it has a lot of meaning to me and it's pretty raw. What do you think?

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  1. I have never went past page 1 on the Poetry post, but I will from now on! Your work was on page 4! I guess it goes by order somehow but WOW. The good reading is on the back burners! Thank you for sharing that gem and I shall look forward to more of your humble thought provoking prose...

    Grade AA+

    [PS]

    I'd give you another A, but I cringe at the thought of suicide.


  2. I liked it.  When I read it I was like 'oh, this fits me'.  Especially

    Remembrance is survival

    Remembrance is my savior

    Time spent remembering is lost

    and yet that's how I'll continue to spend my time

  3. i like it, it shows alot of your emotion towards your loss, and i can relate to alot of those words you used. i can tell its got a lot of meaning to you and its a very beautiful and expressive poem.

    its very nice.

  4. that was amazing. i could feel your pain, i had an image in my mind of what you went through!

    That is wonderful writing. Its wonderful that you can channel your feelings into your writing!

  5. I like it :) This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

  6. Your poem is impressive  and praiseworthy

  7. I absolutly love it. It even made me think that it was about suicide before I even read the bottom. Nice job.

    I guess the first sentence is what gives it away..yet it is not too obvious.

    I'm sorry for your loss :(

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