Please tell me you honest opinions? 10 pts!

Question

Tell me if i should change anything?

you made me laugh

you made me smile

at first i thought it was worth a while

you liked me

but i loved you

you broke my my heart

into little parts

you got me thinkin

if you still care

if you ever wanta get back together

just say when and where

and i promise you this time

it'll last always and forever!

Answer 1

yeah last two lines are a bit cliched  

Answer 2

I like the whole thing you really get your point across

Answer 3

Take out last two lines.

My suggestion to replace them:

my heart

i'm still peicing together

desperate for you forever

Answer 4

Well, you don't have a consistent rhyming theme throughout the whole thing. What I mean by that is that say the first two lines rhymed, and then the next two lines didn't, and it repeated like that. Or you could split it up into three stanzas of four lines and take out the 'you liked me' line.

You made me laugh

You made me smile

At first it was worthwhile* (you might like the line this way?)

Here's my look on the last two lines:

If you want to be together

just say when and where

I can't calm my longing

it's my deepest, truest prayer.

Not really sure if that's what you're looking for though (I like the length of the last four lines). Editing is one of the most important things about any writing process, you might want to go over it again and flush out unnecessary words that don't add much meaning to it or any good rhythm and add more descriptive words to make it more immersive and well rounded