Pliz read and critique my poem ' he spoke'

Question

He spoke in a language I didn’t understand

He spoke and I felt the pain

He spoke about how he was like me once

He spoke referring to my skin health and state of mind

He spoke about a girl he once loved

He spoke with such affection

He spoke with such depth

He spoke and suddenly tears fell

He spoke his voice pregnant with hate

He spoke even in silence - not a word said

He spoke of an enemy

He spoke of stealth

He spoke, I felt so scared

He spoke to me no more

He spoke his last words

He spoke so I speak so we speak

He spoke about AIDS.

by Dee

Answer 1

That's a very deep and sad poem:( i think it's very good, though.

Answer 2

i thought it was good the he spoke part on every line made it very affective i dont get why u talked about AIDS in the last line was that what the whole poem about sorry i am a little slow

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Answer 3

I like it, but honestly after the fourth "he spoke" I just omitted them and read the interesting parts.

How about he spoke 'of' AIDS instead of about.

Answer 4

Very boring - too repetitive.  The AIDS bit just ruins it.