Pls Help me to make a better sentence !! Pls !?

Question

The sentence goes like this:

"Joy is an emotion. It happens at the time when a person attain or achieve something that he or she think is meaningful and acceptable."

Is this sentence correct ? Pls provide me with more a proper sentence. I will provide BA.

Answer 1

"Joy is an emotion, which occurs when a person attains or achieves something that he or she thinks is meaningful and gratifying."

Answer 2

Firstly you must change it to, '...when a person attainS or achieveS something that he or she thinkS is meaningful and acceptable.' Apart from that there is nothing wrong with it.

Answer 3

One way you could rewrite it is: "The emotion joy can be attained when one accomplishes a meaningful task."

Answer 4

"Joy is that emotion that occurs when a person achieves or attains a desired aim or goal that is meaningful to them."

Answer 5

Joy is an emotion. It happens when a person attains or achieves something that he or she thinks is meaningful and acceptable.

achieve changed to "achieves"

attain changed to "attains"

think changed to "thinks"

I can also rephrase the sentence better, but I think the subject-verb changes are the most fundamental here.

Answer 6

the emotion joy can occour when a person achieves something that he or she believes to be meaningful or acceptable.

personally i would give a totally fieerent discreption of joy, i would say. joy is an emotion which fills a person with happiness, ect ect

your discription is very robot-lik, not very human.....

hope i helped.