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Plz revise the short paragraph plz its urgent?

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China shows boundless hospitality to foreign travellers. China is known as a filthy country; many countries think of Chinese people as the poor who do not care about others. However, this Olympic gives a new impression that what many countries thought about China was wrong; in fact, tourists are surprised at China because the Chinese stand in a line to wait the bus and are willing to help foreign travellers if they have any questions by the languages that tourists speak. Western tourists are also astonished at the blue sky. The Citizens of Beijing think of the sky as grey and pale because there are winds carrying yellow sand in spring and many factories and vehicles send out pollution. Therefore, the Chinese can only see within five meters and wear the mask on their mouth and nose However, the Chinese Government spent one billion dollars to make the sky blue and forced factories to be closed during the Olympics because it concerns tourists’ health. China demonstrates concerns about tourists, which makes them to visit China again with a great memory.

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  1. I agree with the first poster>> your paragraph needs a major rewrite here as you're combining several thoughts.  And what happens to the tourists' health after the Olympics?  The factories will be back in business, spewing air pollution > not the place I'd want to visit.


  2. It is morally repugnant to ask others to do your homework for you. You learn nothing, and are turning in someone else’s work as your own, which is know as plagiarism. It would be best for you to revise your own paragraphs, thus advancing your own education.    

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