Plz tell me if you like this poem I wrote...be honest.?

Question

No one to love

No one to hold

No one to share the memories with when we get old

All alone

With a broken heart

Looking for light in the dark

With no light to shine when we are apart

Here I sit with a broken heart

Answer 1

That is a great poem.

It has a good ryme too.

But, I agree with some of the other people.

It does seem more like a song, than a poem.

Answer 2

I personally think that it sounds more like a song. It would be a really good refrain. I found it easier to sing it than read it. I think that maybe in line three, you can take out "with" because it is kind of an unnecessary word. Otherwise I found no mistakes, because I don't think you wanted any punctuation.

Answer 3

i like it! it reminds me of a song. it's sad but people can relate to it. i really like it! even though it's sad! :'(

Answer 4

Yeah I Love It.

One Problem Though.. Its Sad Lol.

Answer 5

Good song lyrics all it needs is a hook. Remember poems don't have to always rhyme.

Answer 6

Yes I like your Poem...

it rhymes and it speaks to the sadness of

all loves that have been thrown callously and tragically away.

when you have fully addressed the grieving parts

you need to move your poetry into the next realm, out of the grieving into the recovery and growing stronger ....