Poem, What do You Think?

Question

Empty bottles of wine

and my nightmare begins to start

Kicked back while I go blind

with reality I part

I walk in the smokey haze of the days of bloodshed lore

when time was, when i was

never here before

My body is laden down

with the wetness of the rain soaked ground

and my heart beats the call of fear

a minister speaks of the days to come

and my ears don't want to hear

A rose is place beneath my head

on the realms of reality

I breathe the sounds of the dead

in a world of commonality

My soul takes it flight with the clouds in the sky

It soars with bright light, I fall and then I die

I wake to find I still breathe

to the sounds of the radio

it was all just a dream

so the tears stop their flow

a nightmare

just a nightmare

Answer 1

I would like it better if you took out the line about it was all just a dream. you are kind of stating the obvious. i always like it when u have to really pay attention to get it

Answer 2

It is really good. You have potential

Answer 3

"begins to start," is redundant.

Line 5 will do just fine, but 8 is misspelled and 9 is also redundant.  I have no tolerance for poor spelling so I can't continue.

Answer 4

i like it

Answer 5

BEAUTIFUL

Answer 6

Wonderful Poem . Really superb job . I give it an A++ .

Answer 7

Love it.

Answer 8

great!

Answer 9

OMG......That is amazing!

You're an inspiration!

Answer 10

i like it!