Poem 3, what do you think?

Question

I Lost My Touch

Woke up from a bed or maybe even a rock

Because touch left me it wasn't hard or soft

Touch left me and taken my shoes

Having to leave without touch means I would loose

Touch left me taking away my splash

Smart enough to take my cash

Touch was hiding at the bottom of the pool

What did touch think I wasn't a fool

I dived right in feeling no splash

Touch apologized and gave me back my wet cash

Touch missed me and grabbed right on

Man I was right and boy was Touch wrong

But once we connected I would never forget

The feeling of me thinking

The touch of me sinking

I woke up and touched around

Man touch was so mean

To think it was only a dream

Answer 1

I like it a lot! It's very rhythmic and flowy. It felt so real, and then you cut it off by saying it was just a dream..I liked that a lot! Great job!

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Answer 2

I like it, I'm not a big poetry admirer but I thought this was good.  By the way, there is a spelling mistake on line 4 - you have written "means I would loose" but I think you mean "means I would lose".

Answer 3

thats really good, sounds like a rap