Poem 4? Good, Bad?

Question

The Beats My Heart Misses

Have a hole in my heart

Making my beats somewhat a part

In time I realize how life could be cut short

Its a game not knowing rules of home court

Living my life just the way I am suppose to

Filling in those spaces with thoughts of you

Because with every step it could be the last

I don't know when its my future or my past

The thing on my mind when its over

Is the day I picked a four-leaf clover

It gave me my luck to just stay one more day

It gave me the luck to have you look my way

Im glad for the beats that are lost

Because for the beats that my heart misses

You could fill in a thousand kisses

Answer 1

I'll start with a kiss...for your heart. Thanks for sharing.

Answer 2

Sorry about the hole in your heart, I hope it heals really soon. Everyone has been replying with help, I did too, so I will show you with this lovely poem if I may? No offense meant in any way. Only suggestions.

There's a hole in my heart,

It beats...somewhat a part.

Life...could be cut short,

That's.. rules of the home court.

Living life...I have to,

Always thinking of you.

Every step could be my last,

Is it my future or my past?

I found a four leaf clover,

My mind.. started over.

I wanted to stay another day,

Then.. you looked my way.

I'm glad for the beats I lost,

And for the beats my heart misses,

Now you can fill it with sweet kisses.

Like I said, this is only to show how to leave out filler words, and to rearrange to make the flow better. Please disregard if it doesn't help at all. Your poem is very good, and I hope you feel better soon.

Answer 3

good how did u make up that!!!!

Answer 4

That was really good. I hope your heart heals soon.