Poem: Do you ponder life`s wonder's?

Question

Reincarnation,

Is it true?

Can that grasshopper be you?

I always have room left for wonder.

They say spirits visit us in different ways,

And I only have room left for wonder.

To ponder life’s truths and lies,

C.S. Scotkin,

Yes, we all at some point ask, why?

You must not argue,

You must not accept,

Just respect,

And always leave room left for wonder.

Answer 1

Wandering wonder, and change of mind when needed, leave doors open that contain treasures unending.

Kudos, neat poem

Answer 2

It is good to wonder, keeps the mind and imagination active. Very nice poem!

Answer 3

I like this. You may want to consider playing with your line lengths and breaks. (If you hate this please ignore it)...Maybe:

Reincarnation, is it true?

Can that grasshopper be you?

I always have room left for wonder.

Spirits visit us in different ways,

and I only have room

left for wonder. To ponder life’s truths

and lies,

C.S. Scotkin,

We all at some point ask, why?

You must not argue,

You must not accept,

Just respect, and always leave room

left for wonder.

It's nice either way.

Answer 4

Not only is that a good question, but you gave the perfect answer:

You must not argue,

You must accept,

Just respect,

And always leave room

To wonder.

(I apologize; it's just that that's the way I read it the second time.)

Answer 5

I like the poems message and the questions in it. I think questions are good in poems as they can say a lot, and indeed, in general, a good way of communicating, as people don't like to be told (even if we like telling 'em!) For this reason, and it's entirely down to you, I'd reconsider the phrasing of lines 10 and 11. But mostly I want to thank you for reminding me to leave room left to wonder.

Answer 6

You certainly can pare useless words but this reads more like a conversational poem and might be wise to be left as it is now worded.  I would however get creative with line breaks and punctuation to enhance reading of this very fine poem.  A personal and unique look at reincarnation.  My compliments.

Answer 7

i like it, i sometimes ponder lifes wonders, but im so smart... and modest that any contemplation of anything never lasts more than 15 seconds.

Answer 8

I am beyond words for your mention of me in your poem.

Your last two lines say it all!  I thank you from the bottom of my heart!

May your little ones inherit their mother's sense of wonder.

Peace to you.

Answer 9

A nice tribute. Some of your rhymes are very clever. I also like th mix of styles, from lyrical to conversing. Very well done.

Answer 10

I love this poem.  I very much appreciate the link to that which inspired it. .  . and would like to comment on the whole premise of re-incarnation.  Like you, I am in wonder of "synchronicity" that occurs in my life all the time like this.

The way I, personally, interpret this event is that the grasshopper put you in mind of your Grandmother didn't it.

I think that was the whole point.  She was just dropping into your lives to simply say "hi" knowing you would both remember the connection of the grasshopper to her earth life.  

Your poem is delightful and I think Todd has an especially good bead on any editing you might want to do with it.  It's altogether wonderful.  Keep posting, I very much enjoy.

Answer 11

I ponder the reincarnation theory and wonder and create..

You have taken my thoughts put them in words, and done a fine job of it.

I rarely show my work to the outside world as most of it is too deep and personal and etched with darkness.

only the light and frivolous do I give for others eyes.

I applaud your work!

Answer 12

What a beautiful story that inspired you! You did an awesome job with your poetry! It would be truly  amazing if it were true about reincarnation ! Very nice thanks for sharing!!  Cheers!!

Answer 13

awesome poem. I think alot of people feel like you at times. very good.

If I had to grade it...I grade it an A+.  Keep writting. =)

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Answer 14

"Hi!",

I thought you did a Great job on this poem.

I am not good enough to provide critique for this one. To me it is perfect.

you have got this one flowing as well. and constructed well.

great job.

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 15

the truth you speak

is like a strong link

to the wonder we feel inside

we can no longer hide

from our wonder from our fear

sorry if this isnt what you want too hear

we see no truth

we know no truth

all we think is lies

the years are passing slowly but some say time flies

progress made progress lost

is reincarnation false

this  is what i thought when i read this sorry if it offends you in any way the last thing i want to do is to speak harsh words to a fellow poet