Poem. Feedback appreciated :)?

Question

This is a modifyed condensed version of an old poem I wrote. What do you think?

"Face to face

Breath over breath

We inhale each other

Your eyes pierce into the depths of me.

I want to slow dance with your soul

And sing with your heart

I want to jump into your mind and feel that vibration whenever

You think of me

Close is never close enough."

Thanks for the comments!

Answer 1

d**n!!<~ sorry for cursing!...but that was amazing!!

[i loved it!]

Answer 2

It's gives you a very cozy, intimate feeling. So it makes you feel what it's saying. I give it a 7 out of 10. It could use a few rhymes to make it feel a little more planned. I think that would add some more warmth.