Poem!!!!!? HELP!!!!!!!?

Question

okay i want to know what you guys think of the poem, and if you can relate to it!

Broken pieces

every second without,

you feels like an hour

every thought about you,

hurts every minute.

when you're not here,

its impossible to breathe.

looking at you,

shatters my heart,

like broken glass.

i look at you to fix the pieces.

But you leave me behind.

alone and

shattered.

Answer 1

great. i liked it a lot. keep up the good work.

Answer 2

..scatters like broken glass..  feels better to me but it is your poem and as such you need to make changes for your own sense of feel and sound.

Nice poem.. I like it

Answer 3

It's so nice! Don't change a thing. I think many people can relate to this poem.

Answer 4

u shouldn't use shatters and shattered the way you did.  

its pretty all over the place..which, is ok, based on thats kinda what the poem is about....your feeling scatered etc.  

to fix the shattered issue, last like could just be

alone and tattered

or alone and  scattered.

orrr alone and wounded.