Poem I made plese read.

Question

every time I pray to you.

I cant help but curse at you.

because of everything I have been through.

every glance I take at you makes me ask why and who?

sometimes I wonder if everything about you is true.

al the words and pictures thats been drew.

all the people you have effected are few.I doubt you I believe in you I love you I hate you in everyway I am srry lord but this is how I feel everyday.

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Answer 1

is this about believing and how hard it is to worship/pray to god or something?

i like the rhymes =p

this poems k

Answer 2

i read it, iqiute liked it.

although the last part doesnt make sense

Answer 3

It's good but the meter is a little off

Answer 4

I'm not a terribly religious person by any means, but I can relate to your poem a lot, but I can also argue your point. We were given the earth and all we need, and it is not God's responsibility to take care of us. Our life is God's gift to us, and what we do with it is our gift to God. Yes, we have absolutely trecherous things happening in out world, but God did not cause them; it has all come from us. Maybe not you in particular, but humans as a whole. Now, back to your poem. It's very rough, but I really enjoyed reading it. Here's a revised version:

"Every time I pray to you,

I cannot help but curse.

After all that I've been through,

every glance I take at you makes me ask

why, and who?

Sometimes I wonder if everything about you is true,

all the words, and all the pictures people drew.

All the people you have effected are few;

I doubt you, then I believe

I love you, then I hate

in every way.

I am sorry Lord, but this is how I feel each day."

Lovely poem.

Hope I could be of help.

Answer 5

i thought it was good it got a little confusing but good

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